United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
This was enjoyable to read. I will read both versions of your story. Well written.
lol this is all my stories
Your comments are kinda hilarious, especially because I know exactly what it's like to cringe at my old writing. It's pretty interesting and satisfying to see that your old stuff isn't THE WORST EVER writing, but that the new is so much better. It's always fun to see how you've improved.
I don't really remember the story, except that I read it, but I'm sure it's worth salvaging/redoing if you're invested in it.
You describe Zaire's feelings and the setting very well. This raises a lot of questions about the characters and their culture, but if you're planning on developing it furthet that's good. Keep writing.
The story is relatable, and much deeper that I originally thought.
I'm too young to know what love is like but I think I have experienced it. In couples. I have never dated anyone. I too have only ever had childish crushes. This is what it was like with one but not as intense. I hope that one day everyone will find the love of their life. I know I perfer hot, British men but who knows?
