Thomas Ray

Well, I can't guess the ending, but this was impressive writing. I've got a few things to say, I hope you don't mind.
This feels nore like a chapter one than a prologue--but that's not a bad thing. Usually prologues are parts of the story that either take place a while before the rest, or that are about a different character than the rest of the book. Basically, prologues are critical parts of the story that don't fit in the rest of the narration. This felt a lot like a first chapter because it showed me your character's normal world (with some exciting extraordinary things thrown in) and told me loads about the character herself. Which leads me to the next bit of praise.
Your main character. I hope you're keeping her as the main, because I'm so intrigued. Mostly by the part where she goes and yells at that aweful father. That takes guts! She's seriously so brave, and that took me by surprise. Well done.
The paragraph explaining the red door and music box and taking four friends was beautiful. It felt so intentional and professional, and perfect. It also gave me the feeling that their world is going to change soon. Or maybe that it's already changing.
So good job. You've made a character I already care about in chapter one. Or prologue.
How much more of this do you have, I'm excited. Also, I hope this review doesn't come across as creepy or overbearing; I tend to get a little too excited.

Unfair! I was just getting to know this character, and you killed them. This is the second time this has happened to me today, too.
Well, anyway, this is cool.

Well. I'm not sure how to say what I'm feeling, so I'll say I love it and hope that says what it should. Seriously, this was so overwhelmingly descriptive! I love the feel of it, it's just so good!

Are all your stories this descriptive? I feel like if you wrote a book I'd read it even just because you seem to know how to describe things meticulously and yet make it so engaging. I certainly feel like I've seen this theater before.
These are original stories, right?

Depression is a sympton, not an illness in and of itself. And what feels so wrong about therapy is that people with depression don't want to be fixed. They already feel broken, they don't want to be treated like a malfunctioning machine.

Here's my rating again. Ugh, I can't believe I deleted that.

This is so good! Upload more please.
Michael and Avery already have a dynamic I know I'll love. Oh, and the writing feels professional enough to make me feel like I'm reading a published e-book.

Very very cool. I don't mind messy poems, and I feel like this one is perfect this way.