SoundOblivion

That was amazing I felt like I was there watching it. LOVE.

Love it!

Very sweet I must say. You did a great job, I found emotion that fit the story perfectly. Five star from me for sure. Keep up the good work.

Beautiful. I love the emotion that was in this. I love that you showed the pain of his loss so well. Good job!

Lovely! I have no constructive criticism, for everything seems wonderfully done. Great job!

Excellent

This is sad. After reading this I thought about the book and movie "A Walk To Remember" and felt the same emotions as this story did for me. 😢
I liked how you presented the idea of a loss happening making it true to it's experience and the reminiscence of it.
Amazing writing.

We all wish for these things and wish these things would exist. Truth is, it is out there, it's a shame that it is hiding though.
Some grammar threw me off for a bit, but I didn't let it bother me from the idea.