Lyn

Thanks for sharing it, I found it amusing.

I thought that this was pretty good. I liked the short stanzas, and I liked the feel of it. One suggestion I would make is in regards to one particular stanza where the last word in one line is "could" and the first word in the next line is "be". I would move the word "could" to the beginning of the first line. This would make it feel like each line is more of a complete idea on its own, and it would help them match the other lines more fluidly. Other than that, good work!