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Beautiful. Words can't describe the emotions that washed over me when I read this. Incredible work!

I think it would be a bit more interesting if you held off the reveal of having a finger in the pocket of the main character. Perhaps use the improper noun “it” instead of “a finger”. Just something to think about. Also, good job with the repetition of the winning and losing, that added texture to the story. Well done!

This was awesome! I love the mystery around the old man. A couple mistakes, but those can easily be overlooked so no biggy.

This is really good! I would love to see what happened that caused her to become this hopeless. Your writing is easy to read and paints the scene quite well, good job!

It’s the truth. Our bodies keep us upright, and yet we look in the mirror and see nothing but mistakes. I’ll tell you what: God doesn’t make mistakes, and he made that body you see in the mirror. You’re absolutely right, perhaps treating it with care will help you see all the good it does for you. Thank you for sharing this!

I couldn’t help but smile at how this student proved that God and man both rely on faith for their principles. And what a twist at the end when you revealed this student was Albert Einstein! You did and excellent job portraying the scene with a simple script. Thank you so much for sharing!

GOOD LUCK!!!

Incredible use of dialougue to tell a story. I wonder what happened between them...
Whatever, I like the sense of wonder I'm getting from this so I'm not going to try to figure it out. Good job!