United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
WOW!!! It was really cool!
I love this
I admire you for speaking out your opinion! Even when the world seems to be against it! This is very true and inspiring!
It's so good :D
This is great!!!
I mean he has done everything he's said that he would so it's not like you can hate everything about someone who is a man of their word but he's still ln hold for convicted rape. How does that play in your head?
Not 'too' far away rather than 'not to far away.'
'Blood was seeping into the snow' rather than 'blood was fading into the snow.' It would trickle down rather than turn pale.
Had you described the man flailing trying to retrieve his lost knife before striking back, then the action would've flowed better. You're descriptions of the fight are tense and fast moving, but bear in mind what I've written and you're writing will improve.
That really lovely ðŸ˜