Auron

It was a really amazing story; I loved the theme. I heart how suspense takes over at the last. The end of this chapter leaves the readers wondering what'd be happening next.

Overall, nice effort. But, it had some inconsistencies.

amazing keep up the good work

Wow, that was awesome! I just can't. That was good. Wow. This is one of the only times I've been rendered speechless.
-KP

It is looking great but you need to finish the chapter!! I'm going NUTS!!

Awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow! Really good! I love the way you used words that made he setting feel even more suspisious or scary, and you took us into the mind of the wolf cub.
The problem I found was that there was a strange gap between when he cub was sleeping to when he saw his dead sister. How did that happen? Where was the fried or misery?
Doing great! Keep it up!!

That was beautiful! I really connected with that!! Irony and just spectacular talent. Please write more like this!

I love this!! So very true!!