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Your story was kind of hard to follow. But from the parts that I could understand I think it's coming along.
Though if you could add names for the characters and patch up a few errors I think that it could be spot on. Good job! ^^

Whoa, that gave me chills. You did really well! :)

oooo.. i loved that cliffhanger!

i really really love this story! its the kinda book i would read for sure! I ESPECIALLY LOVE EMMAA! she just seems so sweet 10/10

aww traceyy :(

That was so good! It really sounded like it was coming from a mom, good job!! :)

yes. yes. YES. I hate talking so much. it's just so difficult and for no reason. and then right when you think that you've totally messed up the conversation you get that last random voice crack (okay that might just be me).

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wow, this sounds like the start of a really good movie. lol