IanG

Overall a good introduction. You could've described the dogs in a little more detail: are they any particular breed? What kind of weapons does she see? Not everyone will have seen the Hunger Games, but I get the drift of your piece.

Its good that you're self-critical, if you want to be a writer that's a hopeful sign. I think you improved as the piece went on.

I enjoyed this story, your characters are believable and your descriptions are evocative. Keep it up.