United Kingdom • 60 y/oReviews Given
I hope things get better for you and soon. I'm not an expert on medical matters, but I know that medicene has advanced greatly over time, and illnesses that were once incurable are now treatable. Don't give up hope.
There was a lump in my throat as I read the ending.
That was very thoughtful Skie.
In paragraph seven, would it be better if the girl was hugging her doll for comfort rather than playing with it? That seems more plausible given that she's just suffered a terrible loss. A poor family might well have to keep working through the shock but they'd be feeling upset, just having to carry on in spite of that. Keep practising and you'll master that.
Could you say the previous killings happened in a different town but the same county? That way its more plausible that Victoria would go jogging alone. Also, if you add that her cat came from a rescue centre that indicates that she's kind and so gives us a reason to root for her. It makes her a little more active.
I wrote a story on a similar theme and put it on this site. Its on page 9 now. Perhaps reading someone else's take on it would help.
No shame in being a mix of strength and weakness, that's true for me and everyone I know.
I found this piece very moving, well done.
This is a plausible, relevant story. Well done.