United States • 26 y/o • TransgenderReviews Received
Yet again, this story is just plain terrible. People like you just need to get off shortstories101.com. You need to take this down immediately, for some people enjoy writing that DOES NOT CONTAIN SEXUAL ACTS!
This story is terrible! It`s upsetting, vulgar, mean, sexual and just plain ugly. I am so surprised that it even wasn`t rejected. Shame on you.
It sounds good and planned out, but I don't know your mom, so I don't know how she will react.
I really enjoyed this. When will you continue it?
If you broke it up into paragraphs it would be easier to follow. Some sentences, such as the final one, could be broken down into shorter ones. That said, formatting can be lost when publishing a story online. It happened to the latest one I published here, but I've edited and corrected that now.