Reviews Received
This story is terrible! It`s upsetting, vulgar, mean, sexual and just plain ugly. I am so surprised that it even wasn`t rejected. Shame on you.
If you broke it up into paragraphs it would be easier to follow. Some sentences, such as the final one, could be broken down into shorter ones. That said, formatting can be lost when publishing a story online. It happened to the latest one I published here, but I've edited and corrected that now.