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this is such a sad love story. i love the details but does the girl live by herself and also where are her parents? just wondering where are the guys parents in all of this. just next time include a backstory. but i love this piece of writing! i love the ending and it really completes the story and i love how the man is telling this story to the daughter! keep writing you are amazing at it!!!

This is really good and I love the way it ends it just that little bit better. Amazing

This story was absolutely amazing. The plot and overall emotions in the story made it spectacular. To be honest, this story angered me quite a bit. Mostly the fact that this seems highly related to real life. Where guys "love" his significant other specifically for her body. It makes me mad, but those emotions of mine is what made this a great story. The realism within it. Keep up the good work.

Was a great read that pulled on my heart strings was amazing to be plunged so quickly and to be absorbed keep it up!

BRAVO!

please find time to write some more, you have talent

I really really loved it. Cant wait to read more :) keep writing

For more mature readers and writers, this may have been an obvious conclusion but coming from a 15 year old writer, I must say this reflects a thinking mind and a feeling heart; quite a comforting and pleasant realisation. The setting of a 'memory chest' is such a wonderful idea that any writer would have loved to base the story on.
Please keep on writing as you have what it takes.
Stay blessed.