United States • 22 y/oReviews Received
that's so sweet
thank you so much for this
In paragraph seven, would it be better if the girl was hugging her doll for comfort rather than playing with it? That seems more plausible given that she's just suffered a terrible loss. A poor family might well have to keep working through the shock but they'd be feeling upset, just having to carry on in spite of that. Keep practising and you'll master that.
I think it was really good, I had shivers after finishing. I think there was one part I didn't quite understand but other than that it was really good!
Whoa, that gave me chills. You did really well! :)
whoa. gave me chills!!! sent shivers down my crooked spine!
