Kat

It sounds great, a few gaps but they can close easily. You really got me wondering about what's going to happen!!
-KP

You're doing great so far, I'm not sure if I'm much help but there are some places when the reader can get confused, like when they are suddenly in Burger King. How long had they wed on the road? Where are they?

It's great, really showing the relationship of the two friends in an awkward but understanding way. Try reading it out loud, it makes the world of a difference.
Love your work!
-KP

I honestly don't think it's an overused subject.... but, whatever. Really, it's about what 20% of early deaths are coming from these days.
I loved the descriptive language and think that this was one of your best. Thanks!!

Wow!! It sounds great! I knew it was a father or stepfather at about the third paragraph, but that's just because I have read things like this. There are a few grammar errors, but besides that it's great!

Wow! Really good! I love the way you used words that made he setting feel even more suspisious or scary, and you took us into the mind of the wolf cub.
The problem I found was that there was a strange gap between when he cub was sleeping to when he saw his dead sister. How did that happen? Where was the fried or misery?
Doing great! Keep it up!!

Oh my gosh it sounds awesome, but this guy shows up out of no where and you never described their destination enough to tell the reader what senery to imagine. I love the plot, though. Please write a sixth!

There were a few grammar errors but the way you wrote the piece of text made it emotional and created connections for the reader. Be strong!