Kiraa

I like how repetitive it was and how it flowed, and I also like the format. I especially like the ending because it shows how resolved everything is in the end. Good poem

I've always loved this story, it was one of the first I saw on this site and it's always been my favorite. Thank you for sharing your talent and your thoughts. Don't stop writing,.

A++++
Absolutely brilliant, breathtakingly powerful, the last line just catches you and is a great way to end a great story.

This is one of the most honest stories I've seen in a while.
The line "I felt nothing sometimes and everything all at once other times" hit me very deeply. That overwhelming sensation of desperation and emptiness, yet swollen with so much despair, is a feeling I wouldn't wish on my worst enemy. You can dm me ANYTIME you need to talk about ANYTHING. I promise you, feelings are temporary. Just as happiness won't last forever, neither will sadness. Keep your head up.

I really liked this story. Your symbolism in this is absolutely beautiful and I'd love to take the time to explore it. Something about when you said "A floor lamp stood behind us like a sentry on guard" really caught my attention, as well as the pigeon description at the end and how Griffin was against a lamp post when the main character saw him. The intriguing beginnings of a tale of forgiveness- or, not to forgive. You're a great writer. Loved how it hints to the morality of war and how it affects the people involved, too. Good stuff.

I appreciate the honesty in this. it reminds me of how we block out memories to cope with trauma and the despair that comes through shame, fear, and anger. The desire to not have an identity in an attempt to reclaim this can be so strong.

The creativity in how you gradually went through the process of not existing is really cool here too. You started with the messages through family and told a story within each of the four line stanzas. I really liked that.

Our worth isn't in our productivity and we aren't defined by the toxic messages of our past-- just a friendly reminder.
Hope all is well.

I didn't find this cringey or cheesy at all- this is actually well done, especially for your age. I enjoy how you separated the sections, steered away from just repeating the title too many times, but I especially enjoy the first two lines. Very captivating intro and heartfelt without exposing a vein. Distant but still genuine. Thanks for sharing this!

This poem reminds me of many things. The first is Jesus and the grace of God because you repeat how the shame has been washed- a concept that's used repeatedly to describe how our shame and past are all washed away through His grace.
I also love how you say "there's a rainbow in your heart" and describe all the negative as outside and positive as inside, hinting that goodness comes from within. I like how you said the "life in survived trees" because that hints there's been a massive storm and it stripped everything away until there was only the goodness left. Beautiful metaphors in this poem.
It also reminds me of the song After The Rain by Rev Theory, so that's good, too. Sometimes, storms do indeed bring clarity.