Kiraa

very interesting and realistic story

Hey sara,

my mom left when I was ten years old, too. we didn't talk for seven years and when we finally did there were a lot of mixed and confusing emotions. I vividly remember how hard those times were. my heart goes out to you. I'm nineteen now, and I'm here to tell you it gets better. that your story becomes your motivation to get up every day and make someone else's story a little brighter. that your worth is not defined by the actions or belief of others, but by the God who created and loves every piece of you and that He is with you and me in every heartache, whether we feel it or not. thanks for sharing the main events of your life with us.

Simple and raw. Very honest and pure with some kind of lingering fire. I, too, am familiar with these family dynamics- just know you're never alone, someone out there is rooting for you and you wouldn't even know.

Super good reflection on how the image-world we're all told to seek isn't always as satisfying as it seems

This reminds me of some ancient Victorian story of a house full of dynamic kids. Thank you for describing all of them, even if only a little, because that truly help set the stage more and I feel some people neglect that. Again, very confused. Very intrigued.

It's really hard to feel like you're not seen. I'm sorry you have to experience those deeply painful emotions.

Your worth isn't defined by the opinions of others, and I know how hard that is to grasp when it's your own mother, but try to take heart. There's always light.

Pretty good writing for the topic and audience. I would suggest adding more details and digging deeper into pulling those out of yourself and onto paper, but deeply personal ones like this are always more about what you think of them- just a little suggestion.

It was an intriguing and, for the most part, well-put together story. The trauma was well portrayed. Nice job.

Was quite intriguing... your use of diction to express the confinement of the place was effective. I felt like I had a quick history lesson there. The subtle darkness that lingered behind the words in this story showed though well.