United States • 19 y/oReviews Received
this is really good
there really needs to be another part i read the entire thing in an hour in math class
Sounded great.
this is a really good poem/story
You're an amazing writer.
The humour of this is childish, but that makes it all the more enjoyable for some reason.
This is really good and really powerful. The ability to reflect on yourself and your past is actually really hard to do. I especially like this sentence: "I saw you, bit by bit, the defeat slumping your shoulders, tainting your soul." The distance you've identified between you and your experiences and the old you all in one swirl mixed with your self-awareness is incredible. Super interesting stuff and written in an impactful way.
This is really beautiful. I can't really tell if you were meaning to write about yourself, or about someone else, or both, but I think that either way this is a very powerful work. It really painted a picture for me, and I think others would agree.