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This was an interesting read! Great story, even though it takes some understanding at the beginning. And also, I'm glad you could get ideas from me! Overall, great work. :D

short and beautiful. wonderfully inspiring!

amazing!

I love it!!!!! Please continue!!!! :D

Nothing to say besides: MORE PLEASE.

This is pretty interesting. I wondered where the demons came from and who was the hero and his partner! I need to know more! The fighting description is incredible and I could easily imagine it!
Overall, great work! I'm looking forward to a sequel!

awww. So sweet.

As for improvement, I don't think there's anything to address. Good flow of words, details, emotion, etc...

Keep up the great work!

In fact, I am reading this! And no, not all the credit goes to me! This is a beautiful story, yet sad. As for ideas, there's another "Writing Prompt I'm writing right now! You can totally take ideas for there. :P Have fun writing and I will look forward to reading your stories! :D