Amber Jones

Very interesting...

As far as the story goes, the grammar and English side of things could be improved. But once again you wrote a story that is great.

Pretty good...

There are so many different voices in our lives, constantly telling us to do something, pushing our decision in a certain direction. So there is a lot of pressure behind making a choice...Good job.

Way to truly speak your mind here! Sometimes that's hard to do in this world when people shut down your opinion without really giving you a chance to express them. Good job.

In answer to your question about Lli's irrational assumptions about his parents' deaths, it might be cause to the fact that we as people(regardless of our class, since this seems to play no role in our ability to rationalize) have a tendency to find a reason for everything. We are constantly looking to place a label or reason on everything so that we can better comprehend it. So in sence, it would seem that Lli is so shocked about this traumatic event, that he abandoned any rational conclusions(emotions tend to cloud all rational thoughts, which seems to be why many characters would seek revenge) and was simply trying to come to a conclusion that makes sense to him, wich in this case is that there HAS to be a "reason" for their deaths.

I think it's amusing, it definitely shows a lot about you. And in remark to your comment below your title, I should have you know that NO story is a waste of time. And can be later built upon or even viewed by a reader as creative and something they NEVER would have thought of themselves. I also thought the jump between the point of view of the story being written within your story to the author in your actual story, was an interesting element that definitely added to your story.

I think that's the hardest part about caring so much about someone when we have to learn to move on without them. When you have to almost hold yourself together because it would seem that a fraction of your very reality has crumbled. It hurts, but you just have to keep telling yourself that it's ok.
At least, that's how I have experienced it to be.