United States • 35 y/oReviews Received
Underneath all of the grammar mistakes and spelling errors there is a good story. Throughout the piece you make many errors such as punctuation, spelling, grammar, repeating, and hard to read descriptions. I don't say this to discourage you, this is a very good idea and I think with enough hard work and time you could reshape this into something amazing, but next time a little more care for errors. Overall it is a very creative idea. Keep writing!
This is not the best... But I also don't want to say it's the worst. It's a little hard to understand what's going on in half of the story because of all of the mistakes that have been made in the story.
I couldn't get through more than a couple paragraphs with all the grammatical all spelling mistakes. I know you apologized for it but that doesn't make it okay. Edit and fix it please.
Thanks for trying and sorry if I sound mean but honest criticism is better than fake praise.
Interesting storyline, except you are missing a lot of commas, and your punctuation, grammar, and vocabulary are kind of sad... maybe edit?
not bad wish it was longer
I was crying. At first I was a bit confused, but when I reread it I Understood. Good job.
Well...... That was kinda creepy and sad
A part from the grammar mistakes and so on. Well written! It's not because there are mistakes, that the story is bad. Writing is about sharing a story, not about telling everyone how good your grammar is. That is for language. Don't pay too much attention to this person. Keep it up! :) ps: Mrald wrote: "with all the grammatical all" that sentence is not really correct either xD and infront of a "but" should be a comma :P