United States • 24 y/o • MaleReviews Received
You could've made more of your narrator's reaction to the death of his uncle. Did he change his attitude to the beach due to that? If so, did he draw on memories of better times and so begin to enjoy it again? Perhaps he realised that nowhere is ever entirely safe and if the sea hadn't taken his uncle then something else might have.
well... that was a twist I didn't see coming. This reminds me of something that should be in the book, "Scary stories to tell in the dark." And I mean that in a good way. I liked it.
Nice story idea! I loved the detail put into it. If this is just how you were at the start, I can't wait to see how great of a writer you've become since then!
Ooooooh a cliffhanger! I loved it! SO intense! good job!ðŸ˜
It's GREAT!ðŸ˜
What a unique pair! I really enjoyed reading this. Great job! :)