United States • 19 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
wow amazing as always
wow. i literally dont know what to say. this is amazing, i love h the way you manipulated your word to make them sound and flow so beautifully. amazing.
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oh i was waiting for it to continue! don't stop in the middle!
is this for someone or just imagination?
Okay a few things, on the very first sentence there should be a comma after right, in the 2nd paragraph, the last part should end with a period. In the last paragraph at the beginning I think you meant while instead of why, and then when the dialogue switches to the next person, a new paragraph should start. Okay, now on to the next part, I thought it was really great and cant wait to read part 2. Love the plot so far.