United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
This poem was very honest. The ending could be finished, it depends on how you look at it, either as an open ending leaving the reader to finish and fill in the blanks, or an unfinished ending. Very true poem though.
Personally I feel like this is more of a horror since it involves murder, but it just depends on how you look at it.
This peice is very honest, and relatable
I really enjoyed this poem. I hope to see more of your peices in the future.
The story is a good idea. However there were many errors, luckily they're very easy to fix. I noticed that your dialogue was a little mixed up, every time someone else talks you start a new line. Like this...
"How's you're day Julia?" Tom asked
"Very well thank you for asking" Responded Julia
Other than that the story was pretty good. I hope to see more from you.
I want to just start off with-I absolutely love, love, love, that poem he had wrote for her. However there are a few little hiccups in the story that cause it to be a tad bit confusing. Overall I liked it though.
Okay, this is a good idea. It's lovely, I like how you wrote from both points of view showing they both wanted to talk again. The only problem was there were a lot of grammatical errors which made the piece a little choppy to read. Overall though it was a cute story. I'd like to see more!
The story has a common concept, one that nearly matches that of the very popular show most teens watch called Thirteen Reasons Why, which I'm guessing you based it on. There wasn't much of a build up and at times it was sloppy and difficult to read. However I think there is a really great story lying in here. Through practice and hard work this could become a very good piece of writing. Keep up the hard work!