United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
A very personal story. Don't doubt your work so much, have a little confidence! Besides if you're looking to improve just keep writing, you'll learn from experience.
As far as loving your best friend, I understand having other feelings rather than friendship (perhaps not quite as intense as love). It's best to tell them, I know it may be scary but you have to put it out there how you feel or they'll never know. It's horrible to be stuck wondering what 'could've been'. Besides, if she doesn't like you and she's mature about it you two can continue being friends. It's a little awkward at first but it gets better. Hang in there buddy!
I noticed this story is tagged as Non-Fiction I'm so sorry for your loss.
Feeling guilt in this situation is understandable, but sometimes hard decisions need to be made. Although your mother (I'm guessing this is true) did not want the operation, it seems that it was needed, you tried your best and that's all you could have done. Do not feel guilty for what you couldn't do, be proud of what you could do, and be happy of the memories you have with your mother, even though it may be hard. Hang in there
I thought the story was rather good in my opinion. I liked the theme of this piece, you had very good description. I don't think it got to a point of unbearable 'preachy' tone. Keep writing, I like the direction this story is going!
I want to just start off with-I absolutely love, love, love, that poem he had wrote for her. However there are a few little hiccups in the story that cause it to be a tad bit confusing. Overall I liked it though.
I thought the story was okay. There were a few grammatical errors that created a few 'hiccups' for me.
Overall the story was fine but, I think in this one extremely rare case I slightly agree with Apemann. Other than that it was good.
The story is a good idea. However there were many errors, luckily they're very easy to fix. I noticed that your dialogue was a little mixed up, every time someone else talks you start a new line. Like this...
"How's you're day Julia?" Tom asked
"Very well thank you for asking" Responded Julia
Other than that the story was pretty good. I hope to see more from you.