United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
This poem was very honest. The ending could be finished, it depends on how you look at it, either as an open ending leaving the reader to finish and fill in the blanks, or an unfinished ending. Very true poem though.
I tend to like short and brisk stories such as this one, they tell you a lot without saying much.
Personally I feel like this is more of a horror since it involves murder, but it just depends on how you look at it.
The plot line of this story was fantastic. However there were many missing pieces and it made certain parts choppy and seemed to be skipped over. Besides that I really enjoyed this story!
Honestly I don't see where Apemann is coming from. I really enjoy your work and I feel it is almost always complete. Don't take the mean comments to heart, some people just don't have a filter. Keep writing, you're fantastic :)
I really liked this poem. I feel slang can be used appropriately, and it definitely was in this one. I didn't really run into any snags other than a little in the beginning when I did see a small amount of "forced" rhyming. Otherwise I thought it was rather lovely
Very heart felt. I am sorry about the pain you're experiencing. Writing is an extremely good way to express your feelings. Well done.
I thought the story was okay. There were a few grammatical errors that created a few 'hiccups' for me.