Optimism101

I know what it's like to hurt someone, you should've gone a bit deeper tho

Unfair! I was just getting to know this character, and you killed them. This is the second time this has happened to me today, too.
Well, anyway, this is cool.

Who is they?

This story gave me hope. Keep up the good work!!!!!

I actually really like this poem. I think it is a way of telling someone that you still care about them but you don't really feel like listening to their problems. I think the only thing that ticked me off was that is was a little harsh, but if that was what you were aiming for then it's a good poem. Keep on writing. You are a great writer and have a lot of potential. TIP: write more poems to get better at writing poems, it actually really helps. :)

Although this story is really good, I think if you just had the first one it would be better. This is just my opinion though.