Optimism101

Yes, they would.

I feel like you could, and should. You mention Fate, but not like fate. You use it as a person, or a something. So that begs the question of what is doing this? I feel like you could go places with this one. Keep Writing! We will keep reading!

Wow. Sincerely. Wow. It's amazing. I don't know how to explain it. I don't know how to critique poems very well XS. But still. Nothing changes the fact that you wrote an amazing poem. Keep up the awesome work!

Everyone does.
Don't know if it was intended, but the story has 123 words, which is pretty sweet.
Everyone breaks
You just gotta know how to piece yourself back together.

Wow. Transformation, and difference. Makes me wanna grab a hammer if ya know what I'm saying. Nice one! Glad to see you doing writes! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

Nice to see another one out there

Ohhhh boy. This is a good intro! It actually sets up a nice haunted-house-ghostbusters-luigi's-mansion-scooby-doo sorta story. Many different paths open, and many different options ahead.
However you say it's gonna have murder and stuff.
So scrap all that and replace it with some deep crap. Maybe some Us, and stuffs.
Otherwise, you got a nice setup!
Keep writing! And we will keep reading!

THat's a sweet story! It looks like it's from the perspective of a sheltered kid. But, if not, then it's still pretty sweet! Setting it up as either a story for a devilish world, or one of sheltered children. Who knows? (Well, of course you do, I mean, you wrote this)
But, I love it! Keep writing! We will keep reading!