Optimism101

So0o0o0oOo0oo, I liked it. It's a good work, it could just use some fine tuning. I'm not trying to be rude, I just wanna help. I think that you did a cool thing with the last 2-3 lines. The last two with their rhyme hit pretty hard and worked really well, but it didn't mesh very well with the top portion. I feel like if you make that top part rhyming, or even just close-ish then it could do a lot better. Maybe try doing some flow exercises too. Either way, it's a good piece, and you're well on your way. Safe travels! Stay optimistic!

You know, i like it.
I always love interesting concepts and plots, especially with fantasies.
It's amazing what the mind can come up with.
Anyways, I did feel like it was a little bit rushed, maybe you could spend some time earlier defining some of the characteristics of a cloud walker and what they do and such. And I know that not revealing things until later is a very fun thing to do when writing, but sometimes it just leaves others confused.
Overall, it's a very nice story, and it has a lot of potential!
Keep Writing! From one author to another.

You know, I was curious why you weren't active
Then I thought you were working on something
I was right
This is beautiful
Very energetic, and sweet
You did a good job
and yes loveling11 is a spammer, i got like 5 separate messages from them and finally blocked them

That's a good you. Not just a nice autobiography piece, but it helps for empowerment too!
Good job!

haha you have writers block
Okay sorry I just needed to say that.
First off, I liked what you did with the whole writing thing, where everything is like that.
But also like for real that happens all the time with me too XD.
Good job!

Wow you truly are becoming a good author. You still have a path to get there, but its closer than ever before

Nice piece

Ouch

I truly hope this isn't based off of past or present circumstances. However, it is a good piece. Very good. Nice rhyming work. Some of those words could be improved for a better rhyme, but otherwise it is very nice.

Its a good piece. The way the monster is described as being one and none is very interesting. To be honest I had to re-read a bit because I read the last line with a British accent and I was pretty sure that wasn't how it was supposed to go down, but that doesn't throw the quality down in any way.
gg