Thomas Ray

Are all your stories this descriptive? I feel like if you wrote a book I'd read it even just because you seem to know how to describe things meticulously and yet make it so engaging. I certainly feel like I've seen this theater before.
These are original stories, right?

That hit HARD. I'm almost not okay withthe levels of pure emotion pouring off of this. The only thing I'd change is how fast the death happened. Maybe if he tried to get her to open the door, then shrugged it off, but then later, like at dinner, he breaks the door.
But wow, I physically hurt at that ending, as well as all throughout. Bullying is not okay in any circumstance, not okay for or from any person, and harmful 100% of the time, if only on a subconscious level.
Keep writing! I love this.

In my opinion, this is your best writing so far.

The descriptions are pretty much perfect, and the pictures they painted were pictures I've never seen before. The overall mood was amazing, and the way each twist added another emotion (I almost want to say memory, because I feel like I know this tree's home) it felt so natural, and built up so smoothly!

Stages of grief. I think you did really well. Because I didn't notice while reading, but it makes sense. I've read/seen/written things based on the stages, but it's never felt as cohesive as this, I always saw it coming. This seemed less like borrowing a structure and more like using something inherent to human experience to breathe life into your story. It's so well done!

There is one thing that broke my immersion, and that's the present/past tense... Sometimes it seemed inconsistent and made me confused about who was telling the story, and when.

But overall, this just feels right. It's so well done. I feel like the ending maybe hasn't reached its final form, but it's far from unsatisfying.

And I wish I could give it seven stars. 9.9/10

This has the unmistakable feel of high fantasy, with multiple races mentioned in chapter one, and just a general vibe of a huge world to learn more about. It's cool! It's a little vague at some parts, and SOME of the dialogue seems a little forced, but those are minor complaints, and they come along with early drafts! This is really good, and I have to ask.... what was the teacher expecting? They gave you a D? Were they asking for nonfiction or something?!?!

YES!!!!! I love this!

Sorry for the four stars.... I really like the mood of this poem, it matches my mood right now.

I really relate to this. I love it. One thing that might be better is if instead of "I then say I'm sorry" it says "you listen as I say I'm sorry" because I feel like most of this poem is directed to "you". Most lines start with "you" and so on and so forth. So continuing with that seems more natural.
Still, I love the emotions behind this.

Depression is a sympton, not an illness in and of itself. And what feels so wrong about therapy is that people with depression don't want to be fixed. They already feel broken, they don't want to be treated like a malfunctioning machine.