Thomas Ray

So sad! So good, but so sad!

True. Tragically true.

This is so good! I love it.

I love this.

I like the idea, and it was super intriguing! Some things could be clearer, but for a first draft, It's pretty amazing. I just have so many questions about the main character that I don't have answers to yet because there isn't more of this story.
So yeah. Keep writing.

Short things can be cool. I wish I had psychology....

This is your best submission so far. My favorite, anyway.