United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
You SHOULD be proud of this. I don't have words to explain how it makes me feel.
While the execution was really good, the premis is just genius. The ending almost felt too down to earth after the story we were just told, though
The way you wrote this, especially the end, was so inspirational!
I want this to be an animated short film
Um.... This is very good. I'm glad there's another part, because I feel personally offended that someone read that notebook!
I'm loving these short segments!
I have one tip. Everli seemed very upset about the notebook being read, but when she found out who it was that did that, she rolled her eyes and moved on. I want to really get into her head, to see how she reacts and why. That being said, I'm super excited to see how this friendship will grow. You've given me a major boost of inspiration. If I found a book this captivating at say, a library, I would definitely check it out.
I'm super excited for the next part.
I... I don't know what to say. I'm speechless.