Thomas Ray

Interesting. I really like the description of the demons.

I like this. It's told like a fairy tale in some ways, and I feel like you're leading up to something, which is one of the most important feelings to communicate in writing. I'll be reading the other prequels when you submit them.

This makes me hurt so much inside. I love it, but wow. I hope people don't see me this way.

This feels like a first draft, as some of the dialogue is a little rough and somethings aren't as clear as they maybe can be, but I'm actually really interested in the Devil's Boy. I can safely say that if I read this in a library, I'd check the book out.
Also, don't feel pressure to get the first draft perfect. I know from experience that if you try to make your beginnings perfect, writing anything other than beginnings is extremely difficult.

Well. That was interesting.

This story is really serious, and while it is your first story, I can vividly imagine what's happening. A sobering story. Good work.

Jolene is a party in the worst way possible. 0/10