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-Lynnyan- is from US United States • 18 y/o • Female

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hypnotic-whisp
~ twixx ~ reviewed Nightmare Story Time

creepy! i like it. it reminds me of fairytale-type things with an enchanted book :>

i do have a generally unrelated piece of advice that i found on tumblr: try not to use "was" too much. for example: instead of "it was cold," you'd write "the freezing air nipped at her exposed skin." using "was" a lot is a sign of summarizing. which is good if that's what you're going for (like showing a long amount of time passing) but odd-sounding in action :P

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hercules
hercules reviewed The Humiliation

A brilliant and very amusing story. Reading that brought to mind the times when I was at school. I had to prevent myself from bursting out laughing when the boys wound up my teachers. Well done.

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hercules
hercules reviewed Doom Befallen

I really enjoyed this story. Well done.

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IanG
IanG reviewed A Space Play Production

Thanks for sharing it, I found it amusing.

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hercules
hercules reviewed In Living Color

I really enjoyed this story too. Well done.

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hercules
hercules reviewed Friends Are Weird (Part 2)

BEN BROWN

I enjoyed this just as much as the first part. Well done.

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hercules
hercules reviewed Friends Are Weird

BEN BROWN

A good piece of writing. I like a good mystery. Well done.

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hercules
hercules reviewed Undertale Soul Traits

BEN BROWN

Another excellent story. The way you described the colours at the beginning brought to mind the twelve astrological star signs. Towards the end it made me think of the light and shadow traits of ones character. Well done.

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