Lyn

Beautiful! You're so talented <3

This is great! You did rly good! I think you could be a bit more descriptive, though. When you wrote "they stopped hugging," I felt you could put a bit more into that. Maybe something along the lines of, "they immediately pulled away, giving nervous chuckles." Other than that, you did really, really well! Keep writing, you're going somewhere!

So good! You're writing is amazing and I can't wait for more of this character! I would like a bit more clarity on how exactly she met death, please. I already have a theory, but it's not a nice one, so I would like to be proven wrong. Keep writing you are so very talented!

This is incredible! You are so very talented! You deserve so much more than you are receiving. Keep writing and unleashing your creativity, it's beautiful!

This is beautiful! I fully agree. You shouldn't judge people so easily. I also think that you should get to know a person before judging them, such as the girl you spoke of. She might be going through something that you didn't know about. Just try to give people the benefit of the doubt, it might just change your perspective on everything!

This is beautiful! It really touched my heart <3

My, my, how the turntables...
A wonderful story! Your writing is so mesmerizing. I can't believe his uncle would do that. Well, okay, I was expecting something to go wrong, but that caught me off guard. Great job!

Wow, I can't wait to see where this is going! I need to know about these men she's being thrust upon in marriage so that I can decide who I like better. But, for now, I'd say that she should marry Gabriella's brother so that she may have a husband as well. You're very talented, keep writing!