Durandal

ruling a kingdom by fear is never a good idea, good job.

Good job!

Wow! That was a great story. I hope you're writing a sequel. If so, I can't wait!

I can't wait till the next part. Good job!

Haha, I am a ninja.

That was intense.

That was very interesting. And scary. You're doing a good job!

It's a nice sequel. But there was one problem that bugged me a lot. I have told this to lots of people, and I hope it's good advice for you.
When writing your story, you should paragraph when people talk. For example:
Instead of:
"Hi Bob!" said Joe. "Hello, Joe," Bob said.
It would be:
"Hi Bob!" said Joe.
"Hello, Joe," Bob said.
This makes it a lot clearer on who is speaking, and easier to read.