Durandal

Haha, I am a ninja.

That was intense.

That was very interesting. And scary. You're doing a good job!

It's a nice sequel. But there was one problem that bugged me a lot. I have told this to lots of people, and I hope it's good advice for you.
When writing your story, you should paragraph when people talk. For example:
Instead of:
"Hi Bob!" said Joe. "Hello, Joe," Bob said.
It would be:
"Hi Bob!" said Joe.
"Hello, Joe," Bob said.
This makes it a lot clearer on who is speaking, and easier to read.

My only advice for you is to make a new paragraph when someone is speaking. it makes it clearer and easier to read. For example: "Hi," said bob. "Hello, bob," Joe said.
Instead, it would be:
"Hi," said bob.
"Hello, bob," Joe said.

I hope this is useful, it's always easier for me to read a story when someone does this.

This is a good story. You did good. There were a few places where it could use a comma or a semicolon, but its still a great story.

I liked that, it definitely shows what it was like.

Good job!