Durandal

Love it! Great cliff hanger. At the beginning of this chapter, did you mean Gimli instead of Gimil? It's just something I noticed, and I don't remember a Gimil.

Wow, didn't see that coming. Good job!

You don't need to apologize for it being short, I know how you feel.

Somebody has anger issues. Was she too angry to think he might find a way to do both? One of my theories was that he would take her family to someone who could take care of them. I can definitely relate to Analise; I don't seem like someone who can be angered easily, but I can be. This story is doing great, keep up all the good work.

Nice. It's sad that things like that actually happen.

I need a sequel! You don't have to, of course, but I am interested to see what you can come up with.

This is a good story. You did good. There were a few places where it could use a comma or a semicolon, but its still a great story.

I think this was an amazing story, I really like it and hope you keep writing stories, no matter what other people tell you.