United States • 29 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
I don't know why but I really find this story attracting and interesting; it's actually the first story I read here.
At first I thought this one in going to be a heartbreaking story, but it turns out to be 'I-can-relate' story--those occurrences which happen all the time when writing something, ugh, those are just... fantastically true. This is a nice piece of work!
Really enjoyed reading the first chapter of your story :)
I like the idea and concept behind this work. Clearly this is something you put a great deal of thought into. Lovely!
Good job, i love how you showed insomnia materializing because sometimes that really is how it feels. I did end up kind of wondering what the real Leonard said though?
Very real. As someone whose familiar with this, I appreciate how you expressed that the person was tricked rather than too caught up in something else, as many stories on this topic often do. Your structure, elongated with the sweet parts and short with the dark parts, expresses many different things in itself. Nice job
Simple, heartfelt and so typically you!
Nice one, hon...
I never expected that was the ending .
Nice little poem. There is one line that reads a little awkward, because its so long. It seems like it interrups the flow and should be two different lines. I could see this poem being turned into an interesting short story. I want to know more about the woman with the poison lips.