IanG

I like this story, you've created a plausible scenario and described it with wit and vivid detail.

This is an evocative piece and I can relate to it. I live near a popular national park and there are times when its good to be alone at a beauty spot. The trouble is that it feels selfish wanting it to yourself all the time, and also many local people would loose their jobs but for the visitors. Even so, your narrator's mood is totally believable.

The gulf between practical father and artistic son rings true. So does his thinking that things would be different had his mother been there.

This is a thoughtful piece that will resonate with many people. Crisis often cause us to question what we once took for granted: the Black Death shook the feudal system; both world wars lead to women and subjects of empires demanding equality with male Caucasians. This pandemic may yet have a similar effect.

No need to apologise for this piece, its a convincing evocation of someone starting a new school and there are only a limited number of basic plots. The ending should make people want to know more.
Perhaps you could've written English translations of the part that's in Indonesian, but don't let that small point put you off.

This is a well written story with a convincing plot and likeable central character. I like the detail of them watching birds together. I'm used to dialogue in inverted commas, nonetheless I enjoyed it. Well done.

You wrote 'load' when you meant 'loud' but that aside its a convincing, well written piece. The declining town and the mismatch between memories and the present are very believable.