IanG

This is a plausible scenario and you evoke it with vivid detail.

You build tension well and your narrator's feelings are believable. Perhaps you could use this as a basis for a longer story. If not its a good short piece.

Your narrator's loneliness is convincing and the twist at the end is good. You raise a lot of questions over the 'imaginary' friend but a touch of mystery can be a positive.

You were brave to shy away from a soppy but happy ending.

There's nothing wrong in being decent, so long as people don't take advantage of you. Unfortunately some people will take advantage. If you're worried about it then say something early on and try to be firm without being aggressive. If that doesn't work then you're entitled to get angry.

If this is autobiographical I hope things have improved since you wrote it.

I enjoyed this story, your characters are believable and your descriptions are evocative. Keep it up.

Overall a good introduction. You could've described the dogs in a little more detail: are they any particular breed? What kind of weapons does she see? Not everyone will have seen the Hunger Games, but I get the drift of your piece.

Its good that you're self-critical, if you want to be a writer that's a hopeful sign. I think you improved as the piece went on.