United Kingdom • 60 y/oReviews Given
The gulf between practical father and artistic son rings true. So does his thinking that things would be different had his mother been there.
This is an evocative piece and I can relate to it. I live near a popular national park and there are times when its good to be alone at a beauty spot. The trouble is that it feels selfish wanting it to yourself all the time, and also many local people would loose their jobs but for the visitors. Even so, your narrator's mood is totally believable.
I like this story, you've created a plausible scenario and described it with wit and vivid detail.
Good to know you're keeping spirits up at this difficult time.
I like your style, you describe things with detail and imagination.
This is a simple but effective piece. Well done.
There's no shame in being anxious at a time like this, so are millions all over the world. Even adults feel like that from time to time.
Try writing 'dad was upstairs working on his computer' rather than 'the computer.' If Mom is in the kitchen working on a computer its a different one than Dad is using.
You portray a child's emotions plausibly, and I like the detail about the spiders webs moving. Perhaps you could've had them find out later if someone died prematurely in the house, or if a previous occupant had a scary experience there.