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amazingly written great job
That is a really sad story. good job.
I found this piece very moving, well done.
I loved it; especially the ending. ðŸ‘ðŸ‘
i know exactly how this feels. i would tell you to stop but i'm awful at comfort and good advice.
who has time for eating? not me-
I have a couple of people in my family who have the same mental thing going on... just keep trying and push through this. I believe anyone can do it. I know it's hard I sorta understand. Soon, maybe you will be able to eat peacefully again.
Wow! I was not expecting that twist at the end! This is a great story!! Great job!!
The twist is good and took me by surprise. Just one thing, a twist needs to be prepared for without giving too much away. If your narrator says, while making up, that she seldom gets a chance to relax or have fun it implies that she has a tough job. If as you imply she goes undercover in dangerous situations, it anticipates the twist but holds some information back. Keep it up.