United Kingdom • 26 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
There's a little bit of grammar errors, and a little bit more backstory about the friend would be nice in my opinion, but overall decent story!
I would love it if you continued this series. The entries aren't quite as long as what would be most suitable but they're fine considering they're the very first few. I like how this story is going along and I'd like to see more.
This piece has some minor mistakes and it seems a little force out but it is still good. One advice is try not to use the same word too much. Like "girl" was used. You want to avoid that. Still this was an interesting beginning and I look forward to read what else you got.
Have a good afternoon
Fate🌸
I agree with Fate that it's good. It's something that you can certainly build upon. The one thing that I wished for, though, is something more finished. It feels like the beginning of something. Something good, perhaps? I, personally, like conclusions or cleverly open-ended stories that leave me with thought.
Everything fit well for the topic, good use of structure.
you should keep on going
Great Story! But some grammar mistakes like, you wrote hat instead of that... and some other mistakes. Not major but just wanted to point it out before someone gives a bad review!
Personally I feel like this is more of a horror since it involves murder, but it just depends on how you look at it.