Kat

What a beautiful story <3

awesome story!

Really Good! It sounded as if it was a real book you could buy at a book store :)

Gahhh yes!!

I really liked this poem. I feel slang can be used appropriately, and it definitely was in this one. I didn't really run into any snags other than a little in the beginning when I did see a small amount of "forced" rhyming. Otherwise I thought it was rather lovely

THIS is my kind of writing!

I love the way you get straight into the heart of the story, your characters coming to life through their words and actions. It's not over-embellished or described or padded-out with superfluous prose.

In my opinion, your story ends just where it needs to end: without a resolution or any answers. You leave those questions for your reader to figure out. THAT is good story-telling.

Without doubt, your best piece so far. Congratulations.