United Kingdom • 46 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Nice little piece only spoilt by a scattered number of typos and grammatical errors.
I would prefer if you actually wrote a finished story instead of posting these excerpts and vignettes. Your first paragraph is an excellent hook, but the rest is just repetition of the same idea without anything really happening.
While the subject matter is important, MaKaylee, this is not a story.
There are other platforms more suited for your writing if you want to post excerpts and vignettes. Disregarding the posting Guidelines is bad form.
A pretty interesting prose poem, even though it's been done to death a thousand times before. Be mindful of the difference between "then" and "than".
I wish you had unpacked this prose poem more. Describe the emotions of being lost in these woods. Juxtapose it with the guy's life outside.
Be bold.
And be mindful of your spelling and grammar.
While the subject is important, you don't have a story here, Gracey. You need to read through the posting guidelines again, because you've obviously not understood them.
Sounds like a summary of a much longer story rather than a flash story standing on its own two legs.
First of all, this isn't flash fiction.
Second, I didn't get the ending. In fact, I didn't get what was going on most of the time.