Sansid

Sooo true!
Completely agreed! I could feel the pain of being bullied cause I have been by a group of boys in school. They bullied my because of my complexion which a bit dark cause I play Tennis and my skin got like a little burned. Even I have short hair, now so they say I look like a boy. Our Indian society is a Patriarchal society.... can't do anything.

Anyways, it was very deep and very well-written!

XOXO,
Sansid

It was really scary... I know it is just a legend but still...
You freaked me out. It was kinda like Annabel but still

Gr8 job!

XOXO,
Sansid

I think it was pretty cool... but I felt like u wanna end the story somehow that's why u started this thing and then the crash and then she died.
I was thinking about her journal and her dad... I can't imagine losing his wife and daughter... I think you should have done something else. I mean... I am not offensive or saying that it is bad and what the hell?? But I am just telling u my opinion.
I hope u understand me! I am kinda blunt but please, understand me!
Sending u love and light!

XOXO,
Sansid

This is sooo beautiful! I loved it....
That is sooo pure and true!

Gr8 usage of words for a poem... Loved it!

Awww....
That was soo cute and sweet!!

I loved it!

XOXO,
Sansid

Agreed IanG.... she is definitely making suspense.... I like when u mentioned that he wasn't a human...
I started thinking about it and I think that he should I guess be a spirit of her mom who has changed her appearance but then...

Xoxo,
Sansid

The opening was really cool... it actually draw my attention. I love the story and there meeting and stuff. I feel that u should write in more description that will make it more interesting and it will definitely draws more attention.
It creates a scene in the reader's mind.

Yes, I agree with @IanG... punctuation was an issue and there were some spelling mistakes also.

Overall, I have to say, you are great, dude! Keep it up!

XOXO,
Sansid