United States • 20 y/o • MaleReviews Given
I always love a "Flame in the darkness" Poem. A saving hope. The last cause. A nice poem.
Alright. You and your "four review" Thing. I don't care if I have to force three of my friends online or not to review I WILL read the next section! WIth the predictions. I see a bit more... humanity from the characters in this section, but also that crippling darkness eminating from Mistress Silver. Lef and Turin... Not sure what to feel about them. I liked this segment. We learn more, and she is starting to get suspicious of the place. Anyways, Keep writing! We will keep reading!
Nice. A little misleading, but isn't that a good thing? An enjoyable story, and definitely is relate-able.
Hurts. A good definition, but it still hurts. Pain is something we all have to deal with, but acceptance is more important. A well written poem. Describes one's nightmares well.
Dang. This one, is amazing. It expresses something that we all have to deal with. That lifelong bond that gets broken. That trust that you have that is so easily removed. It is written with such certainty, such truth, and after reading the Author Notes, it makes sense. It's always hard, and always will be, but we can always move on. We can always grow to be better. With spelling and grammar, it could use some more edits as well, but as a story, and autobiography, it's amazing.
I can relate to this. Maybe not directly, but from a different point of view. It's sad to see what I don't, to know the side I will never see. I can't imagine the pain it would bring. On another note, it expresses the sadness, the hurt, the pain, everything. It shows every second of the event, and it hurts. It really does. I feel so bad for a fictional character. It is well worded, I wasn't able to find mistakes easily, and its amazing. I hope you keep writing And as long as you do, I will keep reading.
Wow you truly are becoming a good author. You still have a path to get there, but its closer than ever before
Nice piece
Another good part to the series. I mean, well written. I wouldn't really call it a "happy" story cus... you know. Abuse. Yeah. Still. Well written, nicely played. Can't wait for the next bit! Keep writing! We will keep reading!