TheWeridDuckling

i feel this o-o

Please, dont give up! I enjoy reading and watching your progress and I would absolutely hate myself if one day you were just gone. Please, I'm begging you. I know you can get through this. You just have to stay strong. If you wont do it for yourself, do it for me. Please...

Nice job!

First of all, that painter needs therapy.
Second, when writing dialogue, create a new paragraph for each new person speaking.
and lastly, try not to switch point-of-view in the middle of the story. It gets confusing for the reader.