TheWeridDuckling

I might actually want to cry. Tis a very sad story.

I loved it keep up the good work!

Loved it! It was kinda sad so keep up the good work!

I found the ending really funny! Good job!

First of all, that painter needs therapy.
Second, when writing dialogue, create a new paragraph for each new person speaking.
and lastly, try not to switch point-of-view in the middle of the story. It gets confusing for the reader.

I look forward to reading the other parts, cheese ball. It's nice and yeah :)

Hey, it's me again! In paragraph 5, you have a quotation mark at the beginning where it's not needed. I personally don't have intrusive thoughts, so I can't say that this has affected me in any way, but I know that this can help others, which is great! Keep writing!

I can relate, every time I see an ambulance I think "who died?" or some of the exact things you said, but I often think "what if I ran away or raised hell in school and just left, just snapped on everyone that's ever done anything to me at all." I try not to though. :)