Thomas Ray

The way you wrote this, especially the end, was so inspirational!

This is pretty cool. Really good for a first poem.

I like this. You better make this a little more happy in the next chapter, because, while I do like sad things, this character needs some joy in her life.
This story has potential, so good luck!

Interesting.

This is your best submission so far. My favorite, anyway.

Short things can be cool. I wish I had psychology....

Wow! This story is really cool. Can't wait for your next submission.
Also, what inspired this story?

This story is really serious, and while it is your first story, I can vividly imagine what's happening. A sobering story. Good work.